Good effort Kevin. One small problem - you need to rewrite the last line 'It connects to skull'. It should say 'It connects to my skull'. But, if you put the correct grammar you will have used up 6 syllables.
Great! You changed it. Well done!
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Good effort Kevin. One small problem - you need to rewrite the last line 'It connects to skull'. It should say 'It connects to my skull'. But, if you put the correct grammar you will have used up 6 syllables.
Great! You changed it. Well done!
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